User talk:Luph

Translations
That phrasing is a direct reference to, and is used to illustrate how the Japanese description of the attack is actually trying to reference Quo Vadis. Translating it in Simple English loses that entirely, removing a ton of meaning from the passage. Translation needs to be respectful of both the intended meaning/cultural context and the plain wording.

"Dance of Hell" better fits the fact that it is being directly compared with the actual name of the attack, Hell Masquerade. As with "Terrible Bee", it is giving a synonym, not just a description, for the name. Having "Hell Dance" immediately before "Hell Masquerade" is repetitious, and makes it less clear which is actually the official name for the attack and which is plainly being used as purple prose. (FWIW, "Hell's Dance" would make more sense than Hell Dance, to make it clear it is being used as a possessive there.) Furthermore Dance of Hell is a more natural formulation than Hell Dance anyway. Not all instances of "Y of X" are unnatural. Infernal Dance may be another option, to impress upon the synonym without being repetitious.

"Terrible Bee" is in the profile straight up in the style of translating a dinosaur's name. It's not a nickname. It's the meta-translation of the name. That's why the profile straight up uses the word for "name", not "nickname". It's like saying someone named Gustafson has the "nickname" of "Gustav's Son". That's not what is being done there.KrytenKoro06 (talk) 17:31, 9 January 2017 (CST)

高貴な存在の女性型堕天使
I'm reading that as ((feminine 女性型 (fallen angel 堕天使)) of の (noble 高貴な (presence/stature 存在))); localizations translate "of noble stature" as "with a haughty personality", which gets at the same point. I agree that "female" is imprecise here -- I think using "feminine" would feel more natural in English, though, and get your same point across. "stature", from comparisons, also seems to have a bit of a positive connotation, so it makes sense to switch that with "presence", which is more uniformly used to indicate merely one's bearing and presentation.

Would you agree with changing this to "feminine fallen angel of noble presence" for the best natural sound in English?KrytenKoro06 (talk) 11:21, 1 August 2017 (CDT)